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the chart below shows the percantage change in the share of international students among university graduates in diffrent canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

the chart below shows the percantage change in the share of international students among university graduates in diffrent canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
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chart
 below shows the
percantage
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percentage
 change in the share of international students among university graduates in
diffrent
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different
canadian
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Canadian
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 provinces between 2001 and 2006. The
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proportion
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proportions
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,years and names of provinces.
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 compare them.
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,province -New Brunswick. New Brunswick in 2006 had 12
persantage
 of international graduates,and 12
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 is the highest proportion in
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. But in 2001 it had only 6
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 2 times in 5 years. Nova Scotia had 10,5
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 in 2006 and 5,5 in 2001. Quebec had 8
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 in 2006 and 6 in 2001. Alberta had 7%
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in 2006
 and 4% in 2001. British Columbia had 10,5% in 2006 and 4% in 2001. Manitoba
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Newfoundland and Labrador had the same
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percentage
 with 7% in 2006 and 4,5% in 2001.
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, province-Ontario,it had 6% in 2006 and 3% in 2001.
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 conclude, in 2006
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 more international graduates than in 2001,with
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