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PEOPLE NOWADAYS ARE NOT FIT AND ACTIVE THAN THE PEOPLE FROM THE OLDEN DAYS. DISCUSS THE CAUSES FOR THIS SITUATION AND SUGGEST SOME POSSIBLE Solutions?

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It has always been argued that these days
people
 are not physically fit and non-active compared to the individuals from the previous days.
This
 essay will not only elucidate the reasons but
also
 scrutinize how they can be solved in subsequent paragraphs. Foremost, Why
people
 nowadays are not fit and active?
This
 is because of the excessive
use
 of technology. To elaborate, after the invention of digitalization
people
 have totally depended on electronic gadgets. They do not work by themselves they only do by machines as it is the easiest method.
Consequently
, they are facing many obstacles related to their well-being
such
 as obesity, back pain and many more.
Besides
this
,
people
 love to eat junk food which gives more fat to their bodies with
this
people
 become lethargic.
For instance
, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that in America 90% of the population prefer to
use
 technical gadgets in their domestic work and on their jobs with
this
 they are not fit in their body and suffer from health problems. Despite the above-mentioned, there are some
solution
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that
firstly
, humans should less
use
of
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machinery and
done
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thier
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it
 by themselves with
this
 they become
fit
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as fit
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 and active as the previous generation. Parents ought to give knowledge about street food and what are the drawbacks of it and indulge in sports activities with the assistance of
this
 they always think before
eat
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 outside food because they know they take it
then
 they become unfit.
To conclude
,
people
 like to
use
 technology because it makes the easiest life for
people
, but it has an adverse impact on
people
's health and commoners have junk because of their unique taste, whilst there number of ways to eradicate
this
 issue. It is the responsibility of
people
 and parents.
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