Your company has sent you on a three-month course in another country. The course is coming to an end, but you would like to prolong your stay. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter -describe how the course benefited you -explain why you would like to delay your return -suggest a date when you would like to come back.

#company #course #country #manager #-describe #-explain #delay #-suggest #date

Hello Mr. John, I am writing

this

letter in regard to extending my stay in Canada after my Italian cuisine

course

comes to an end on 15th September 2023. First and foremost, thank you for giving me

such

a great opportunity to learn new skills and explore different countries.

While

pursuing

this

course

I learnt different methods to prepare one dish. Not only

this

but

also

came to know about various types of spices which not only enhance the taste of the food but are

also

beneficial for health. As you already know that

course

is about to end but I would like to stay some more days to learn Chinese cuisine as well which will not only help me but

also

benefit our company in their sales. So the

course

I am going to take is for one month, from 12th September to 12th October.

Hence

, I will be there around 14th October to continue my employment. Looking for a quick response so that I can register myself in next month's batch. Yours sincerely, Kulwinder Kaur

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task response

Expand on the benefits of the course in more detail.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure a more appropriate and professional greeting and closing for a letter to a manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

177 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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