Some people believe that low foreign language proficiency is still a big obstacle for Vietnam to integrate fully into the world. Others think that the key to global integration does not lie just in foreign language proficiency.

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In the society today, foreign
language
proficiency
is a matter of controversy. Some people accept the fact that
language
skills are a big barrier for Vietnamese to integrate
to
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the development of the world. But others think that foreign
language
proficiency
is not the best way to integrate into the rapidly
develoaping
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developing
world.I believe that, if Vietnamese have high
language
skills, the road to success will be shortened and
that is
a great advantage for them to help their
country
develop more, so I agree with the first statement.
To begin
with, foreign
language
proficiency
will be a strong advantage
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each individual when we know how to take advantage of it. They will write dissertations sent to major universities in developing countries to apply for scholarships to study abroad and after studying abroad they will
become
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masters
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, doctorates and contribute to the
country
.
For example
, President Ho Chi Minh used to be fluent in 7 languages: French, English, Chinese, Italian, German, and Russian.
This
has helped me a lot in liberating our nation and liberating our
country
.
On the other hand
, if they do not have foreign
language
proficiency
it is indeed an obstacle for us to develop in study and work.
Because
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,
currently
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, many universities in Vietnam use
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for entrance examinations and international companies in Vietnam require employees to have foreign
language
skills.
Secondly
, foreign
language
proficiency
helps you to expand social relationships or have a good opportunity when you graduate high school or university, it can even help you find your destiny in the future. In conclusion, good foreign
language
proficiency
bring
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many
benefit
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to Vietnamese people in the future development of the
country
, to put Vietnam on par with other developed countries.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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