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Education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most governments spend much to educate the young. But despite
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 effort, there are often
adults
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 in each
country
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 who remain illiterate.
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, some believe that educating these
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 should be an even bigger priority, prompting a suggestion that more money should be spent on them. In my view,
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 governments should help uneducated
adults
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, they should not be considered the priority.
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 with, the percentage of young
people
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 in each
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 is significantly greater than the percentage of illiterate
adults
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. So it makes more economic sense to continue spending more for the youth so the
country
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 can have higher returns. The youth are the future
laborers
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, entrepreneurs, and leaders, so it is just right to spend on them. The uneducated
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,
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, are the minority. So it is unwise to give them a much higher budget.
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although
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 these
adults
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 might not have wanted to become illiterate, they still chose to stay that way
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 of finding ways to learn how to read and write.
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, young
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 have not made that choice. So the possibility of them becoming the best version of themselves is there, making them a better investment. Now, it is often the case that
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illiterate
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 are those doing menial jobs or possibly living a life of crime. So it makes sense for the government to help so they can become more productive members of society. Though they should be given attention, these
adults
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 should not be prioritized nor receive more funding than the youth. In conclusion, young
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 have more potential, so it would be foolish for a
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 to focus on a few uneducated
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.
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, governments should still find ways to help
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adults
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, but never at the expense of the next generation.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy programs
  • functional illiteracy
  • social mobility
  • inter-generational poverty
  • workforce development
  • economic growth
  • social cohesion
  • public health
  • civic participation
  • resource allocation
  • national development
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