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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. RITI u sho rite a It is the give no Nr Norbiton industrial area now Farmland Town = Factory Planned future development ) Farmland River Playground Town Shops School Medical centre

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The maps illustrate the
plan
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 to establish of industrial area in the future by the site of Norbiton in town.
Overall
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, they planned to modify the factories into housing.
Thus
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, they made a decision to construct more roads.
To begin
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 with, in the centre of the town , there is a rounder board in both industrial plans.
However
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, they
plan
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 to build the north and northwest sides.
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, along the north , a path was built through the river in farmland.
Next,
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surrounding a rounder board they are planned to build shops , medicals, and more housing.
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 end of the east side of the path there is a school and on both sides are built housing as we as a playground, which is located in the center part of the path.
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, both maps have farmland across the river
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 a town which is located in the west. On average, they
plan
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 to construct another tiny roundabout below the main one. Truthfully, they will have a better
plan
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 to create more housing rather than the factory.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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