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It’s better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#it’s #students #study #home #school
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is think
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 that studying at home is more
affective
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effective
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 for pupils than
obtain
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obtaining
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 knowledge at
school
. In my opinion, I’m in disagreement with
this
 statement. In the beginning, the main reason why studying at
school
 is better than
practice
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practising
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by
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on
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 their own – their homes is students are not able to gain knowledge affective easily,
they
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and they
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also
 could not
be learned
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learn
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 the
right
 study style if the parents did not do
a
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apply
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good behavior. Because at home or study with their own do not have any systematic
way
 to learn, or
the
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a
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 mentor that ensure the
right
way
 to learn.
For example
, children who are not able to go to
school
 in Vietnam do not have a
well
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behavior
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 when they live or organize something in
a
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the
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right
way
.
In addition
, the second reason why students must
to
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apply
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go to
school
 and
learning
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learn
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 the methodical
way
 is that
student
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students
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 do not have social skills or life experiences.
Due to
learn
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learning
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with
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on
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 their own, have not
any
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no
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 friends, especially good friends or good teachers.
As a result
, they do not have good social
skill
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skills
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 and life experiences. In conclusion, the main reason why studying at
school
 is better than
practice
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practising
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by
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on
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 their own – their homes
is
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are
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 students are not able to gain knowledge
affective
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effective
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 easily, they
also
could not
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cannot
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 be learned the
right
 study style if the parents
did
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do
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 not do
a
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apply
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good
behavior
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behaviour
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 and student
also
 do not have social skills or life experiences. So they must to go to
school
 at all.
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