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The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.
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The bar chart compares the turnover rate in billions of
dollars
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 in four categories of video
games
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; namely mobile phone
games
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, online
games
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, console
games
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, and handheld
games
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, over the period of seven years from 2000 to 2006. From the statistics, it can be inferred that handheld
games
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 made up the highest consumption and experienced a slight rise throughout the period shown. In stark contrast, individuals lost their tendency in console
games
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 and the figure reached half of the initial sales by the end of
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 year. In 2000, It is noticeable that there weren’t any online or mobile
games
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 and online
games
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 emerged in 2001 at just under 1
billion
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dollars
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.
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, after a high rivalry between them in 2002, it seems they sold the same number of around 1.5
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dollars
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, cell phone
games
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 overtook the latter and reached 3
billion
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dollars
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. But, in 2006, online
games
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 won
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 rivalry, and people bought more online
games
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 at 9
billion
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dollars
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.
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,
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 folks used handed
games
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 under double that of console
games
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 in 2000,
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 comparison saw the biggest difference span in 2006 and the amount of money spent on handheld
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 is 2.5 times more than console
games
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 which reached 18
billion
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dollars
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 and under 3 million
dollars
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, respectively.
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