In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Many developed countries give an opportunity for young people who can experience
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year
gap before
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their student
life
.
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this
chance sounds good,
however
there are pros and cons. In
this
article, we will discuss about above interesting idea. There are 3 positive aspects.
Firstly
, before starting a new environment in
university
,
students
can have a recharge time
such
as
traveling
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locally or internationally.
Additionally
, they can work part-time within a
year
to get familiar with
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life
situations which will remind them about the important skills or knowledge to be equipped during
university
life
.
Secondly
, during
this
year
,
students
can build up gradually their interest and accumulate their passion which is vital for their career orientation.
Thirdly
, a feeling of freedom is so important after many years of studying will empower them to take the next
life
milestone.
Conversely
, there are still side effects of
this
decision.
For example
,
students
will lose their learning momentum
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someone who
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not have
asuitable
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a suitable
plan for 365 days before back to
university
.
Moreover
,
students
will waste
this
crystal time without consultation from their parents or educators.
Finally
, without planning carefully,
students
will not utilise
this
year
for their
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later. In conclusion, in
this
modern society,
students
are really given more choice to prepare their
life
, especially study
life
in
university
. The circle of learning, recharge, learning and recharge again is so important for everyone not only
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because it can help them so much for the rest of their
life
. It is believed that
this
gap
year
with a lot of experience will be
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source for their career orientation
as well as
contribute as
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time for their whole
life
.
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  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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