The first pie chart illustrates Why individuals travel to vocation by bicycle. On the other hand second pie chart describes the reasons Why people go to work by car.
The two pie charts illustrate the
reasons
for the transportation types that give
by the groups of individuals. Wrong verb form
are given
Overall
, the main reasons
for cycling were health and the quality of the environment, while
others prefer to use the car is convenient.
To begin
with the bicycle, there are 60% of individuals that concerned about their health and pollution, and both of them are the same proportion at half of this
percent
. The remaining categories experienced almost the same percentage, with 15% for parking problems, 13% for faster than driving, and 12% for financial Change the spelling
per cent
reasons
.
Turning to another pie chart, 40% of them use the car because it is comfort
, Replace the word
comfortable
while
the second largest proportion is long distance at 21%. The remaining reasons
are equal at 14%, with the exception the safety is only 11%.Submitted by jirawat.sea on
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