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The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The three pie charts give information about the average percentages of
sodium
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, saturated fats and added sugars in four typical meals, namely
breakfast
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, lunch, dinner and
snacks
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 which may be unhealthy if eaten too much, consumed in the USA.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 dinner had the highest percentage of consumption of
sodium
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 and saturated fat,
while
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 the lowest percentage of all types of nutrients was allocated to
breakfast
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.
In addition
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,
snacks
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 had the biggest share of added sugar. The biggest share of
sodium
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 and saturated fat was allocated to dinner with 43% and 37% respectively. There is no difference between the figure for
snacks
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 and
breakfast
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 in
sodium
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 consumption, as the former was responsible for 14%. It is noteworthy that the percentage of saturated fat and added sugar was the same with 16% in the
breakfast
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 meal. The intake of added sugar in
snacks
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 ranked first with 42%, and there was little difference between the figure for saturated fat in
snacks
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 and lunch with a narrow margin of 5%,
while
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 the figure for the latter was a higher 26%.
Additionally
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, lunch had the second rank in the consumption of
sodium
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 with one-third of the total share.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, breakfast, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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