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The given bar chart represents spending for five main fields in the USA, Canada, the UK, and Japan in 2009.

The given bar chart represents spending for five main fields in the USA, Canada, the UK, and Japan in 2009.
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 bar chart shows the cost percentage from 5 categories in 4 different societies in 2009. In summary, there are 3 big things that people in all countries spend money on which are Food, Housing, and Transportation and 2 groups that people tend to not spend money on which are Health care and Clothing. Housing, which was the top spending field for almost every country took more than 20%
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, Japan did not. Following with the Food, the only place that spent a lot of money on was Japan which used around 23% and for the rest, the cost was around 20% or less. Moving to Transportation, the top spender in
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 field was Canada (20%) and the percentage in other countries was less than 20%. The United States spent more than 5% on Health care which was the highest country since the rest used less than 4%.
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, every country spent almost the same percentage on Clothing which was around 5%.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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