some people think that children should be encouraged to play outdoor games that require physical activities instead of playing computer games at home. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,

kids

tend to sit at home and play video

games

all day.

Consequently

,

this

raises the concern of many

parents

who feel responsible for their

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well-being and brings them to the question of whether they should encourage their

children

to play outdoor

games

or not. In my opinion,

parents

should seek different ways to motivate their

children

to go outside and catch some sunshine.

Furthermore

, outdoor activity is both good for the physical and the psychological health of our youth.

Firstly

, playing

games

and doing exercises outside in a park or other appropriate environments is proven to play an important role in

kids

' growth and well-being.

This

is now proven as a scientific fact that

children

who participate in outdoor activities experience fewer troubles growing up than those who are a bit lazier.

Also

,

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early

ages

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, one needs more physical activity

otherwise

he might become fat and experience a lot of heart diseases early in his life.

For instance

, my cousin Sepehr never came out to play soccer with

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in the afternoons when I used to play with other

kids

in the alley.

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he became overweight and soon he realized he

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to have an operation on his knee.

Thus

, I can name countless problems that

kids

will little outdoor activities might face including growth problems and obesity.

Secondly

, what recently has attracted many scientists' attention was the psychological aspect of outdoor activities on

children

and how crucial it is for their mental well-being.

Kids

who stay at home all day playing video

games

usually make

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friends than they need.

Furthermore

,

this

isolation affects

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social

behavior

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and

this

is a huge disadvantage for their present and future.

For instance

, I was Sepehr's only friend for most of his childhood and I remember him having a tough time making friends in

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.

Hence

, as the mental side of

this

story is being explored more and more by scientists,

parents

now might want to prevent their

children

from becoming

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isolated and lonely person in future.

To conclude

, the question of whether to encourage

children

to play

games

outside is a very important question that

parents

need to know the answer to. I strongly believe they should motivate their

children

to spend time outdoors to reduce the chance of

kids

stopping their growth, getting heavy and becoming depressed and isolated from other

kids

.