The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below illustrates the
number
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of closed and opened stores in an unknown country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the
number
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of both openings and closures decreased.
Although
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considering several fluctuations, the decline of opened shops was more than closed ones over the mentioned duration.
To begin
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with, the
number
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of openings in 2011 was 8500 but it dipped to only 4000 in 2012 and after that, it recovered and reached 6100 in 2014.
whereas
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the
number
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of closures was 6400 in 2010 and with some fluctuations, it almost levelled off with 6500 in 2014.
In addition
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, the
number
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of closed shops fell to the minimum
number
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of 500,
although
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it reached 5100 in 2016 and
finally
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stood at the same
number
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in 2018. On the other side, the openings decreased to 4000 in 2015 levelled off in 2016 and 2017 and
then
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declined to 3000 in 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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