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Nowadays more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. 🔸Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has always been argued that these days technology is proliferating regularly and many business conferences and learning sessions are provided by online platforms. The advantages of
this
 notion are more as compared to its disadvantages and
this
 essay shall shed light upon my perspective in subsequent paragraphs. Foremost, why business meetings and training are taking place online?
This
 is because
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it saves
time
of
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 personnel. If employers do induction with their employees with the assistance of social sites, they could save their
time
 commuting which they spend on reaching their destination That
time
 they may use on other work with
this
 company can gain their trading rating point.
Besides
this
, there are a number of facilities available on the Internet. The prominent is that video recording. In case
people
 are busy with other work during
meeting
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then
 they might record it and listen in their free
time
. Despite the above-mentioned merits, there is a demerit that commoners pay less attention to meetings and learning sessions because they do not have any fear of teachers or owners.
Consequently
, they may become careless and more use
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their smartphones for their entertainment source
such
 as playing games, listening
music
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 and many more.
For instance
, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that in India 55% of
people
 prefer to take online classes but it has an adverse impact on
people
's minds Now they do not have much knowledge because of less concentration on their tasks.
To conclude
,
although
 online meetings and business training have a bad impact on
people
, there are a number of advantages in current life It not only makes
people
's life easier but
also
 save money and
time
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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