The chart below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time in the year 1982. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the information below.
The table depicts the information about the amount of
time
(in percentage) spent by the unemployed British people on several activities last
year. Overall
, it can be seen that both men
and women
were busier in the morning than in the afternoon.
To start with, it is obvious that both groups spent most of their time
in the morning. Women
were mostly spending their time
at 49% doing some housework, ,
Change the punctuation
apply
however
Add a comma
,however
men
spent a significant amount of time
at 22% looking for jobs, with only 2% drinking, whereas
women
only spent the least of their time
enjoying their beverages at 1%.
On the other hand
, even though both groups had fewer activities in the afternoon, it seems that women
were busier than men
. Men
only allocated 7% of their time
to go shopping, whereas
women
at 21% spent more money on shopping. Interestingly, men
sometimes spent the least amount of their time
lying in bed at 4%, but there was no woman at all (0%) who took a nap last
year.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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