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The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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The maps illustrate the changing of Norbiton
town
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 from a factory
area
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 to a developed residential
area
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 plan in the future.
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,
currently
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 the
town
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 of
Norniton
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Norton
 is located with many factories which are beside the road.
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, in the future, the industrial
area
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 will be replaced by the expanded residential
area
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.
In
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the
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apply
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present,
the
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Norbiton
town
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 is
fulled
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with
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 industrialization,
also
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 all of them are just next to the main road. The farming
area
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that is
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 on the north is divided from the
factories
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factory
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 site by the river.
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, there is a single roundabout and two main roads that are branched out.
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 the future of Norbiton
town
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, the housing
area
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such
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 as houses, shops, playground, school and medical centre will be constructed next to two roundabouts and four main roads.
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, the houses and agriculture
area
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 on the other side
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 segregated by the river will be connected by the bridge.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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