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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart and table provide information concerning the
tourist
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tourists
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 from 4 regions of origin including Asia, Europe,
US
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the US
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, and
other which
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others who
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spending
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spend
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holiday
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the holiday
a holiday
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 at
particular
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a particular
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 resort in Australia. The data can be divided into 2 parts, namely, the pie and the details of
tourist
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tourists
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 spending time
in
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on
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 vacation which
explain
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are explained
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the
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in the
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 table. In terms of the chart, figures are given in percentage units.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that peoples from Asia are the region who most
traveling
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travelling
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 to Australia
however
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, they showed the lowest
number of
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apply
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average staying length.
To begin
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 with the pie chart, the people
form
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from
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 Europe and Asia are the top two
nation
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nations
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 that visit Australia on holiday which is 37% and 35%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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