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According to this bar graph,we can see the difference of weekly spending by families between 1968 and 2018. Reporting the main features and differences

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,families’ costs changed in these years.
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, I want to start with food.Families spent 35 % of their income on food in 1968.But,
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percentage
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 changed in 2018,it was be average of 17 %. The second
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 is housing. It consisted of 10 % in 1968.
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,
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percentage
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 increased about 9 % in 2018. The third
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 is the spending on fuel and power,which is necessary at every time.The rate of
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 is 6 %.But it decreased in 2018.The other comparison about Clothing and footwear, in 1968 spending more than in 2018. It’s interesting that the cost rate of household goods was equal in 1968 and 2018.
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, the information about personal goods is
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 noted. It is less than in 2018.The other
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 is the transport fee.It was only 8 % in 1968.But,
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percentage
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 changed in 2018.Eventually, the
last
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one
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 is leisure.There was a big difference in
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 field. So, the
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 in 2018 was approximately three times more than in 1968.
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 research displays us with more interesting facts about it.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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