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The graph below shows the number of tourists visited a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visited a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
amount
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 and staying on
island
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an island
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 in the Caribbean
island
 between 2010 and 2017. The total
amount
 of
visitors
 showed a
dramatical
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 rise over,
also
 the
amount
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number
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 of
tourists
 who stayed on
cruise
ships
 increased.
While
 the millions of
tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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 experienced a downward tendency. In 2010, the
number
 of
visitors
 who stayed on
cruise
ships
 and
island
,
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were
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was
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 around 250,000 and 750,000 people respectively. The
number
 of
visitors
stayed
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staying
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 on
cruise
ships
 went up rapidly, exceeding
visitors
 staying on
island
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an island
the island
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 in
a
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half of 2015 and reaching approximately 2
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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. The
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 increased and remained constant by 2015. After that people who visited the
island
 declined. The graph
has
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is
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 shown at the lowest point of
period
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the period
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. The total
number
 of both
tourists
 who stayed on
cruise
ships
 and
island
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islands
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rew
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grew
up
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sharply until 2015. Between 2015 and 2016, the
overall
amount
 stayed at the same level.
Then
 climbed to 3.5
millions
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million
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of
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tourists
. The total line
has shown
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shows
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 the highest point
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, visitors, cruise, ships, island, tourists, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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