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Human activity has had a negative impact on planet and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others think actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Undoubtedly, for decades, human activity on
Earth
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 has negatively affected the environment, causing massive problems
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 as global warming and the extinction of various flora and fauna in the
world
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. Some
people
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 argue that the damage cannot be reversed as it is too extensive.
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, the opponents including myself believe that there are several steps that can be taken to slow down or even reverse
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 condition.
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 with, the
world
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 we are living in today has changed in the
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 20 or 30 years. One of the most significant changes is rising the
Earth
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's temperature, leading to other issues
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 as rising the sea level and melting the polar ice that some
people
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 say could not be repaired.
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 in return may cause many lands to drown. Indeed, it is predicted that in 20 years Jakarta, the capital of Indonesia will drown, if the authority does not take significant steps to mitigate
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 issue. Another argument proposed by the
people
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 who believe that damages to the
Earth
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 are non-reversible is that many animals or plants have already extinct or are in great danger.
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, the
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 at some point will
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 extinct.
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, In my opinion, there are several actions that can be taken to reduce the damage to the
Earth
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. First of all, I agree that the main problem we face today is probably global warming as it affects all
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 around the
world
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. In fact, the main cause of
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 problem would be the CO2 emissions from vehicles and industrial activities.
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, reducing greenhouse gas emissions may greatly reduce the
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's temperature.
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, many countries in the
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 have started to replace coal and fossil fuels with green energy sources to reduce the emission of
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 gas. Electric cars have
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 been introduced worldwide, and gaining popularity.
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, there are a few steps that can speed
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 positive development.
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, governments can put tax exemptions for citizens who own electric cars, and the public contributes by promoting a more environmental choice
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 as using public transport to commute
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 of private vehicles. In conclusion, I believe that there is a lot we can do to save our planet,
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 as reducing greenhouse gas emissions by using electric cars and encouraging the use of greener energy sources.

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