The two pie charts illustrate why British do migration to and from during a question period.

The two pie charts illustrate why British do migration to and from during a question period.
These two pie charts demonstrate the
reasons
why
people
immigrated to or emigrated from
Britain
in the year 2007. The chart on the left belongs to the
reasons
why
people
immigrated to
Britain
. The most prevalent
reason
is to have a definite job which takes up to almost a third of
this
population. The
scond
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second
most frequent
reason
is to have formal study in
Britain
. These two combine to cause more than half of the immigration. Accompany, to look for work and other
reasons
are the next most frequent
reasons
respectively.
Also
, 6% of the immigrants'
reason
is not clear.
On the other hand
, the second chart belongs to the
people
emigrating from
Britain
. To have a definite job is the most frequently stated
reason
for
this
phenomenon.
Furthermore
,
people
immigrating to other countries to look for work, count for the second largest
populatoin
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population
of emigrants. Oddly enough, 18% of emigrants did not state a
reason
.
Moreover
, other
reasons
and
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then
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than
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,
to join
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other
people
are the next most frequent
reasons
for their emigration and eventually,
to have
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having
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a formal study is the least prevalent
reason
for British emigration accounting only for 4% of the emigrants.
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