The two pie charts illustrate why British do migration to and from during a question period.

The two pie charts illustrate why British do migration to and from during a question period.
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These two pie charts demonstrate the
reasons
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why
people
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immigrated to or emigrated from
Britain
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in the year 2007. The chart on the left belongs to the
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why
people
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immigrated to
Britain
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. The most prevalent
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is to have a definite job which takes up to almost a third of
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population. The
scond
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second
most frequent
reason
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is to have formal study in
Britain
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. These two combine to cause more than half of the immigration. Accompany, to look for work and other
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are the next most frequent
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respectively.
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, 6% of the immigrants'
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is not clear.
On the other hand
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, the second chart belongs to the
people
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emigrating from
Britain
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. To have a definite job is the most frequently stated
reason
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for
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phenomenon.
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,
people
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immigrating to other countries to look for work, count for the second largest
populatoin
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population
of emigrants. Oddly enough, 18% of emigrants did not state a
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.
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, other
reasons
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and
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apply
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then
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than
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,
to join
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joining
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other
people
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are the next most frequent
reasons
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for their emigration and eventually,
to have
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having
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a formal study is the least prevalent
reason
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for British emigration accounting only for 4% of the emigrants.
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