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The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the use of various
transport
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 modes to travel in European cities in three different years. It is evident from the chart that, the car was the most popular
transport
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 mode throughout the
period
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while
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 the use of other
transport
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 decreased during the
period
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. In detail, in 1960 just about 7 per
cent
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 of people used a car vehicle to
transport
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 but during the
period
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 the popularity of using cars increased significantly and in 2000 the figures reached approximately 36 per
cent
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.
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, bike and foot were the highest proportion of
transport
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 in 1990 about 25 and 33 per
cent
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 respectively
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 throughout the
period
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 the rate of
transport
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 modes for biking and walking decreased dramatically.
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, the popularity of using the bus for transportation among people fluctuated. In 1990 more than 15 per
cent
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 of citizens used the bus and in 1980
this
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 figure increased by about 27 per
cent
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while
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 in 2000 the proportion use of buses declined moderately and reached about 15 per
cent
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, period, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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