The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 ann 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 ann 2011. Summarise  the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart Illustrates four types of
rentals
and
sales’
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rates which were
rentals
,
VHS
sales
,
DVD
sales
and Blu-ray
sales
from a certain film store annually between 2002 and 2011. In 2002, among all categories,
rentals
topped the charts at 185,000, followed by
VHS
and
DVD
sales
at 85,000 and 48,000 respectively. The number of
rentals
decreased gradually from 185,000 to 58,000 from 2002 to 2011.
Similarly
, the
VHS
sales
rate dropped from 85,000 to the bottom of the chart
in
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a stable pace from 2002 to 2006.
In contrast
, the figures
of
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for
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DVD
sales
boosted up and
meet
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the peak of the chart at 215,000 in 2007,
then
dropped to 180,000 in 2011.
In addition
, Blu-ray
films
popped out in 2007 and their
sales
rate went up to 12,000 which is the smallest proportion in 2011.
Overall
,
rentals
and
VHS
sales
showed a downward trend
whereas
DVD
films
went upward and started being the best-selling in 2004.
In addition
, after 2006, no one brought any
VHS
films
from the store.
However
, Blu-ray
films
came out in 2007 and demonstrated a tenfold increase in 2011.
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