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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities, do you agree or disagree?

As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities, do you agree or disagree?
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Many individuals believe that businesses have social responsibilities, alongside earning
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, I partly agree with
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 statement. Some people think that companies should only concentrate on making
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 rather than their social responsibilities for two main factors.
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, if a factory considers the social effects of their products excessively, they will suffer from the hard-tight rules and standards, which prevent the
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 from progressing.
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, these corporations will be asked to be more cautious and not to take risks in order to gain more
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, if companies that work on AI were worried about people's personal security too much, they would not make
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 progress that they have made by now, as they have access to every detail of a person's life.
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, caring about the social impacts of a
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 sometimes affects the income of a factory as well. After producing a product, it can bring about some side effects for consumers, and if the producer is responsible for paying compensation, their income will become lower, because they have to cover the damages made to the consumers.
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, businesses should be socially responsible for two major reasons. These traders are doing
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 in a country, and they are more powerful than ordinary people,
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 the fact that they have more
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, they must be responsible to the public. It is a global rule that those who earn more
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 in a
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 must take responsibility as well.
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, in some cases, safety is more important than making progress. To exemplify, biotechnological goods are really dangerous and should be used and produced in a safe manner. These products can easily create health issues like those related to one's digestion.
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, their producers have to take care of
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 situation. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that companies are trading and making
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 by that, they should
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 consider social responsibilities for numerous reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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