The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultureal land become less productive. The table shows these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultureal land become less productive. The table shows these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The given pie chart indicates some reasons for
land
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degradation around the world
while
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the area was degraded by three continents
during
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ten years from 1990 to 1999.
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, one hand, it can be seen that over-grazing and
deforestation
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accounted for
two thirds
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of
land
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degradation.
On the other hand
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, in
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America, Europe and Oceania,
over-cultivation
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,
deforestation
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and Over-grazing were the most effective causes of
land
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disintegration during a decade. In the pie chart, 35% of
land
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depreciation belonged to over-grazing and it
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by
deforestation
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and
over-cultivation
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with less than a third and 28% respectively.
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, only other reasons with 7% caused to
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the
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land
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. In North America,
over-cultivation
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with 33% was the most effective cause
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of degrading
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land
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;
however
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,
deforestation
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had the lowest proportion with almost nil (0.2%). In Europe, though
deforestation
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experienced the
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highest percentage of
land
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decline with 9.8 % , over-grazing decreased by almost half (5.5 %).
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, in Oceania, over-grazing took place roughly ten times more than
deforestation
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.
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,
although
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over-cultivation
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never occurred in Oceania, North America and Europe saw it with 7.7% and 3.3% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, deforestation, over-cultivation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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