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The table shows information and prediction regarding the change in the percentage of population aged 65 years and above in three countries.

The table shows information and prediction regarding the change in the percentage of population aged 65 years and above in three countries.
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The given image describes the proportion of people aged 65
years
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 and over in three countries (
Canada
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,
Germany
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 and the
UK
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) in the past two
years
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 1988 and 2000 and an estimated
percentage
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 in 2030.
Overall
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, a consistent increase in the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 is noted in all three countries in progressive
years
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.
Germany
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of elderly
population
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 followed by
Canada
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 and the
UK
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 and predicted to remain so in the future. Between 1988 and 2000, the
percentage
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 of people aged 65 and above
years
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 grew by 5% and went up by 25.45 % in
Germany
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, and 20.67% in
Canada
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.
However
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, a minimal change was noted in the
UK
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 and the
population
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 reached 14.89%.
Furthermore
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, a prediction is shown that by 2030,
Germany
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 and
Canada
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 will have almost a similar change in the
percentage
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 jump and will reach 30.42 and 26.35% respectively. The
population
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 in the
UK
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 will
also
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 rise by almost 5% and will rise to 25.09%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, canada, germany, uk, percentage, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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