your recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on wheather to go to college or to try to get a job.you think he/she should get a job.write a letter to this friend.in your letter;say why she will not enjoy going to college ,explain why getting a job is a good idea ,suggest the type of job that would be suitable.

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Dear friend, I RECEIVED YOUR LETTER AND I GOT TO KNOW THAT YOU ARE IN A CRITICAL SITUATION WHERE YOU

CANNOT

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CAN

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DECIDE ON THE PATH THAT YOU NEED TO CHOOSE GOING FORWARD.

FIRSTLY

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THESE DAYS IT IS REALLY HARD TO FIND A LOW-COST COLLEGE

DUE TO

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THE ECONOMIC SITUATION YOU CAN CHOOSE

JOB

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A JOB

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THUS

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,ALL THE COURSES ARE THE WAY MORE EXPENSIVE THAN THE AMOUNT THAT YOU

COULD

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EFFORT AT THE MOMENT .

THEN

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,YOU WOULD NOT ENJOY STUDYING BECAUSE OF EXPANSIVE.

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SECONDLY

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I HEARD THAT YOUR FATHER LOST HIS JOB

DUE TO

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HIS ILLNESS STILL HE COULD NOT GET A SUITABLE JOB FOR HIM.YOUR FAMILY UNDERGONE SOME FINANCIAL PROBLEM.IF YOU

FINDING

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FIND

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THE WORK ,YOU DEFINITELY RELIEVE FROM THE STRESS.

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ADDITION

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YOU MIGHT BE ABLE TO SOME AMOUNT SO THAT YOU COULD SPEND ON

THEIR

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apply

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YOUR FUTURE GOALS.

FINALLY

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,AS YOU ALWAYS DEMONSTRATE THE SKILLS OF AN ENTREPRENEUR I SUGGEST YOU BE THE PERSON YOU ALWAYS WANTED TO BE.I THINK YOU WILL BE A GOOD FIT IN THE

BUISNESS

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BUSINESS

INDUSTRY. I WISH YOU GOOD LUCK IN YOUR FUTURE ENDEAVOURS . REGARDS, SOWMIYA.M

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

177 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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