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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The map illustrates a social
park
 when it was first introduced in the past and the same
park
 today.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the ancient
park
 has been changed into a modern
park
 with more entertainment and visitors .
Moreover
, the
park
 today is bigger compared to 1920.
To begin
 with, a notable change is that a stage for musicians has been replaced by an
amphitheater
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amphitheatre
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 for concerts.
Moreover
, the water feature has been built with an entrance to the underground car
park
instead
 of a glasshouse. The pond for water plants has been transformed into a children’s play. Another striking change is that the rose garden has been redeveloped
instead
 of a fountain and the seats which are placed over the map have been changed position around the rose garden.
Therefore
, the rose garden which is placed on the north-east of the map has been made into a cafe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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