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Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opininos.

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Some
people
 complain that high
taxes
 are useless and unnecessary. I believe that it is necessary for governments to take
taxes
 to hold public services that cost a high budget. But the
taxes
 should be affordable and the use of the budget should be announced to the public. On the one hand, high
taxes
 allow the authorities to build well-planned public service projects
such
 as extending highways, building high-speed rail and improving the education system. In many countries, governments take heavy
taxes
 and their citizen live a
high quality
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high-quality
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 life.
For example
,
people
 who live in Norway pay high
taxes
 and the Norway
government
 provide one of the best social welfare system in the world.
People
 can get free education in Norway.
On the other hand
, high
taxes
 are a double-edged sword.
People
 often feel bad about excessive
taxes
 because of political corruption and imperfect construction. If the authorities show their efficiency and accuracy for public services, there will be few
people
 who feel dissatisfied with heavy
taxes
.
In contrast
,
people
 will feel their
government
 cannot be trusted and are unwilling to pay heavy
taxes
. In my opinion, the
government
 should plan their spending transparently and announce their accounting record to the public on a regular basis. What is more, the
government
 should raise
people
's average salaries and improve the economy
first,
then
 increase the
taxes
. So
people
 have the ability to afford the increasing
taxes
. On the whole, everything has two sides and high
taxes
 are no exception. The
government
 should take heavy
taxes
 meanwhile providing perfect public services.
In addition
, the
taxes
 should be affordable for the public and the budget should be used transparently.
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