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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the top 10 countries for
electricity
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production
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 and consumption in 2014. China is the leading producer and consumer of
electricity
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, followed by the United States, Russia, and Japan. Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and South Korea have similar levels of
production
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 and consumption.
To begin
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 with, we observe the countries are ranked
according to
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 their
electricity
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 usage. On number 1, we have China with the highest amount of
electricity
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 being utilized (5,322
billion
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kWh
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)
as well as
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 made (5,398
billion
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kWh
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).
However
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, on
second
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the second
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 number we see
United
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the United
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 States, producing 4099
billion
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kWh
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electricity
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of electricity
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 and at the same time consuming 3866
billion
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kWh
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 of it. Afterwards, Russia and Japan are on 3rd and 4th and are using an average of 900
billion
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kWh
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 and are making almost 1000
billion
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kWh
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.
Furthermore
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, Canada and France are showing a similar pattern. In both
the
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apply
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places,
electricity
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production
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 is near
to
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apply
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600,
whereas
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production
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 is
that
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apply
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of
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apply
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500. We find Brazil, Germany and
Korean
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Korea
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, Rep on the bottom
with
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ranking number 8th, 9th and 10th respectively. The three of them combined are consuming and producing a total of nearly 1500
billion
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kWh
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light
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of light
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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