The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four different mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four different mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.
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The multi-line graph illustrates data regarding cell phones expended
among
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every month
from
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a European nation from Jan to September. Generally speaking,
it is clear that
the
overall
amount of money about telephones has dramatically increased in the considered time period, albeit with specific trends for each country. First off, in January Alpha was less in a state,
while
more increasingly numerous in other types of cell phones. After that, until
June
this
money spent remained
roughly
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5
euros
.
Similarly
, Lex had a
slowly
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rise in
this
same period, which
held
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likely 12
euros
.
However
, the Alpha faced a steep and constant climb in the number of costs, skyrocketing from 5
euros
to 25
euros
between
June
and September. ,
Similarly
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the standard cost of agreement regarding the Lex
creep
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up 13
euros
to roughly 18
euros
in the four months.
On the other hand
, the Domo and the Sim TX faced moderate growth in the rate of monthly
contract
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contracts
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before
June
, which
reaching
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reached
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20
euros
and approximately 15
euros
.
Finally
, the number of the Domo in
June
and the Aipha in September both had the highest, which
the
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same 25
euros
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words june, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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