The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top

grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the

main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate the proportions of students from both genders that excelled in five subjects over the period
of
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between
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1960 and 2000.
Overall
,
Males
were better at
Science
,
Math
and
Humanities
,
while
females
obtained higher grades in
Arts
and
Languages
.
To begin
with, in 1960,
males
surpassed
females
in
Science
and
Math
with nearly 33% and 30% of male students that scored high grades compared to 10% and 4% of the
females
.
In contrast
,
Females
excelled in
Arts
,
Languages
and
Humanities
with nearly 30%, 45% and 32%
scored
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excellent grades respectively.
While
the percentage of
males
that got good scores in those subjects
were
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was
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9% in
Arts
, 21% in
Languages
and 23% in
Humanities
.
On the other hand
, in 2000, there was a slight decrease in the percentage of
males
that excelled in
Science
, by 10% and by 12% in
Math
, despite that,
males
remained in the lead. There was a small increase in
Arts
to about (21%)
,
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and a significant increase in
Humanities
to 42%. As for the
females
, the proportion that obtained top degrees in
Science
and
Math
remained nearly the same. There was a slight decrease in by 5 % in
Arts
and by 10% in
Languages
and
Humanities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentages
  • top grades
  • achievement
  • gender disparity
  • educational trends
  • academic performance
  • comparison
  • decade
  • educational policy
  • societal expectations
  • improvement
  • educational attainment
  • graduates
  • academic excellence
  • statistics
  • educational landscape
  • benchmark
  • parity
  • gender roles
  • historical data
  • performance indicators
  • educational improvements
  • longitudinal study
  • scholastic achievement
  • gender gap
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