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the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods

#numbers #visitors #ashdown #museum #year #surveys #visit #two #periods
The table shows the statistical data
visitors
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 to the
Ashdow
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Ashdown
museum
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 before and after the advancement of
museum
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the museum
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 and the chart displays the data about
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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 level of
visitors
 to the
museum
 before and after the refurbishment. From the available record, it is
cleared
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 that
number
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the number
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 of
visitors
 to the
museum
 has increased after decoration and
also
 the
satisfaction
 level. The numerical values of the table
shows
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 that
number
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the number
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 of people who visited the
Ashdow
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Ashdown
museum
 has increased from 74000 to 92000 after the
museum
has been
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was
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 decorated.
And the
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 chart indicates that
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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 level of the visitor has
also
 exceeded by
double
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doubled
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 after it has been renewed. Talking about each category
like
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apply
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before getting renovated only 15% of the
visitors
 were very satisfied but
this
 value jumped to 35% after the
museum
 got
new
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 look.
Similarly
, satisfied people increased by 10% from 30% to 40%.
On the other hand
, the dissatisfied
visitor
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visitors
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 reduced by more than 20% from 40% before refurbishment to only 15% after that.
Overall
,
people
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people's
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 positive
response
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responses
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 about
satisfaction
 exceeded by more than double after the
Museum
has
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changed its look.
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