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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two charts present two kinds of data: the first is about the
happiness
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 level between married and unmarried
people
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 and the second gives information about the satisfaction rating because of
children
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 among married couples.
Overall
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, unmarried
people
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 are not as happy as married ones
while
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 in the unmarried
people
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 category,
the
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 certain
age
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 group is happier than others.
However
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, the second chart shows that the percentage of
happiness
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that is
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 affected by whether having
children
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 or not is just shared in similar numbers.
To begin
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 with, individuals who are married from all
age
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 groups witness the biggest proportion of
happiness
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 in numbers around 40%-45% compared to unmarried
people
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. Meanwhile,
people
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 with
age
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 65 and over who prefer to not marry, experience more satisfaction at 34%
whereas
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 the other
age
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 groups only reach the figures roughly 21%-22%.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of
happiness
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 in another chart between married
people
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 who have
children
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 under 18,
children
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 older than 18 and those who have no
children
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 almost alike at 44%, 41% and 43% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words happiness, people, children, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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