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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two charts present two kinds of data: the first is about the
happiness
 level between married and unmarried
people
 and the second gives information about the satisfaction rating because of
children
 among married couples.
Overall
, unmarried
people
 are not as happy as married ones
while
 in the unmarried
people
 category,
the
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 certain
age
 group is happier than others.
However
, the second chart shows that the percentage of
happiness
that is
 affected by whether having
children
 or not is just shared in similar numbers.
To begin
 with, individuals who are married from all
age
 groups witness the biggest proportion of
happiness
 in numbers around 40%-45% compared to unmarried
people
. Meanwhile,
people
 with
age
 65 and over who prefer to not marry, experience more satisfaction at 34%
whereas
 the other
age
 groups only reach the figures roughly 21%-22%.
Furthermore
, the percentage of
happiness
 in another chart between married
people
 who have
children
 under 18,
children
 older than 18 and those who have no
children
 almost alike at 44%, 41% and 43% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words happiness, people, children, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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