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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of public
transport
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use
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 rate by six different
age
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groups
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 and two locations in one country in 2016. The two places were large cities and others. It is worth noticing that, the percentage of public
transport
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use
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rates
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 of large city
residents
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 at all
age
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groups
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 were all higher than other
residents
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, except
people
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 who were 61 to 75
years
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 old. For the large city
residents
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, among all
age
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groups
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, 31-45
years
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 old topped the graph. There were
almost
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 70% of
people
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 who were 31-45
years
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 old used public transportation
whereas
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 the
use
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 rate of
people
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 who were 61-75 and more than 76
years
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 old at 10% and 15% respectively.
Besides
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, the percentage of 0-15, 16-30, and 40-60 year-old
people
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 was all around 40% to 55%.
Although
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 most of the public
transport
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use
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rates
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 of other
residents
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 were approximately 15% at all
age
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groups
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, about 26% of 16-30-year-old
residents
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 and 8% of those who were more than 76
years
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 old used public
transport
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 in 2016.
Overall
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, the proportion of public
transport
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use
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rates
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 of large city
residents
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 fluctuated in 2016.
In contrast
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, the
use
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rates
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 of other
residents
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 remained roughly at all
age
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groups
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, use, age, groups, rates, residents, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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