many manufactured food and drink products contain highlevel of sugar which causes many health problems sugar products should be made of more expansive peoples to consume less sugar.do you agree or disagree

For an introduction, Nowadays, prepacked foodstuff is causing severe health issues. The task statement notes that the price of
sugar
items is to be increased to minimize consumption because of well-being issues ,which are coming through precooked meals and drinks, which have high
sugar
levels in them.I believe there is truth in the observation and as required,
this
essay will elaborate on the reasons before presenting an appropriate conclusion. Examining closely, nowadays every business which manufacturing food
products
uses
sugar
as an ingredient for tasting and to get high profits which leads to well-being problems
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moreover
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it has become a habit that present-day everyone started eating outside foods which include artificial ingredients, added
sugar
, fat,fibre,nutrients so on.. which affects the body to feel sick.
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beverages or soft drinks are similar to foodstuff
products
including artificial flavours with plenty of
sugar
to taste good which degrades health a lot.
Furthermore
,the cost of each item is much less compared to other edible
products
for high sales and large-scale profits. so each and every product that includes
sugar
or bi-
products
of
sugar
is expensive which makes people discourage the consumption of
such
products
. Adding to it, for ,instance have a cousin , Who likes chocolate madly.
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, When he was in childhood ,he used to eat a lot, which made his teeth decay so now he has some dentures fixed . ,
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to avoid
such
health hazards we need to avoid sugary items.
To conclude
, Based on the foregoing discussions,
this
essay is hereby concluded in support of the prompt in full concurrence with the task statement.
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