Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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you start generating income and

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people

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more help

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way.

finacial

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necessary

means to get up. I completely approve of discarding the help by

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poverty alleviation
economic inequality
developing nations
foreign aid
sustainable growth
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education
fair trade
trade barriers
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