Many parents think they should be friends with their children on social networks. To what extent do you agree?

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It has always been argued that nowadays mothers and fathers consider that they ought to be mates with their offspring on social sites. I partially agree with
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essay shall shed light upon my perspective in subsequent paragraphs. Foremost, why do
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believe they should be friends with their
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on social networks?
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is because they can save them from depression. In
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contemporary era, students have more pressure to study they
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study in the morning at school after that they join learning sessions on
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or offline, so they do not have enough to spend with their
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and do not tell their problems to them with
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they major issues related to their mind, but if
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communicate with their juveniles as a friend, they could share their joys and sorrows with them and they give suggestion how to solve it. Paradoxically, the fundamental reason behind my disagreement is that no doubt
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need to become friendly with their
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it has an adverse impact on
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's lives. They might indulge in bad company as they will not have fear of their mom and dad.
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, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that in America 65% of
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live with their
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like peers.
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, they do wrong things in their life
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as they had addicted to drugs, alcohol and maybe more because they are not afraid of them.
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,
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must strictly behave with their
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.
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it is a little bit of a good method for
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, in the future it will have a bad effect on
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's well-being and development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital communication
  • parental oversight
  • cyberbullying
  • inappropriate content
  • proliferation
  • open communication
  • stronger family bonds
  • breach of privacy
  • online safety
  • boundaries
  • positive influence
  • responsible interaction
  • meaningful interaction
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