IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

At an event you attended recently, you met an employee of a company you would like to work at. You talked to her and she suggested that you should contact her if you needed any help with your job application. Write a letter to this employee. In your letter: 1. remind her how you met and ask for some help 2. tell her what kind of job you are interested in 3. ask her about the company's job application process

#event #employee #company #work #contact #help #job #application #process
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Ms. Brown, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I'
m
 writing
this
 letter to inform you that I would like
to
Correct pronoun usage
you to
show examples
 help me
how
Change preposition
with how
show examples
 to join
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
your company.
Firstly
, I
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
met each other
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
last
 Friday at
an
Change the article
a
show examples
 Cookie Foodie Lover event. As I told you, my name is Ramita. I'
m
 a pastry chef. I'
m
 good at baking all of
bakery
Add an article
the bakery
show examples
.
Moreover
, I need your
helping
Change the form of the verb
help
show examples
 to
apply
Add the preposition
forapply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 job in your company. As you know, I'
m
 a pastry chef. So, I'
m
 interested in
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 career that
about
Add a missing verb
is about
show examples
 baking bakery.
In addition
, I have
an
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
experience
about
Change preposition
of
show examples
 being
pastry
Add an article
a pastry
show examples
 chef in a Dusit
Thanit
Correct your spelling
Thani
 Hotel
about
Change preposition
for about
show examples
 2 years and 3
month
Change to a plural noun
months
show examples
.
However
, I would like to know the company's job application process. Could you describe the
neccessary
Correct your spelling
necessary
 information and write it back
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 my email? My email is [email protected].
Also
, you can contact me on my number phones. My number is 0809025178. Please let me know if you can
helping
Change the form of the verb
help
show examples
 me and I hope you
sending
Wrong verb form
send
show examples
letter
Add an article
a letter
show examples
 back.
Your
Correct the word
Yours
show examples
 sincerely, Ramita Panprayoon
Submitted by babydreamx on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: