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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #education #hunger #food #aid
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 culture as you know that
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 so many belief separate by the different ways of living to make
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ways
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 of living make
people
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some
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different
reason
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. Most
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people
 think that education will make you pass through and solve all of the problem because we
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 world that have high
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competitive
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 you have
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 education you can get a wealth-paid job easily.
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of
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people
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 on living their life the best goal is to make more money. For the reason
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food is the physical human needs that we have to
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everyday
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 think we have to mix it together because we need
education
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 to
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pass through
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pass-through
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pass through
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 all of the
physicalpshysical
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physical physical
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problems
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problem
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 and we
also
 need food for living
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ship
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