Some people believe that it is bestto accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

It is often argued that taking in a disappointing
situation
is a good choice,
while
others
belive
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believe
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people
should attempt to get a better
enviroment
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environment
.
Although
accepting a worse
situation
might help
people
living
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easier,
this
essay believes that it's better to try to get a satisfactory
situation
. Nowadays most
people
are facing many
competitions
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competition
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in finding a job, living in a better house, having a better education system for children and so on.
Furthermore
, having a lower threshold can help
people
escaping
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from the depressive competition and
saving
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them time in searching and waiting for a satisfactory environment.
For example
, in
China
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many
people
can not tolerate oppressive competition in megapolis and they are trying to find a slightly worse
situation
in small cities or towns.
However
, in today's world, if
people
are not trying to live in a better
situation
, they will end up with a worse environment.
This
is because once
people
accept
worse
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a worse
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situation
they will
lost
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lose
be lost
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the threshold and get
a
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into a
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more
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worse
situation
.
Therefore
, attempting to get
a
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appropriate
situation
is critical to live in today's world and it
keep
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people
to have purpose
of
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in
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life.
For instance
, most
people
find that when they are trying to get a better living they can keep
themselve
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themselves
positive and active.
Nevertheless
,
for
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apply
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some
people
who lower their living
situation
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,situation
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they will
lost
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lose
be lost
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their ambition and
living
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live
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without purpose, which
make
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life meaningless. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,
while
accepting a worse
situation
can help
people
living
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live
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easire
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easily
, it will make
people
losing
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lose
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thier
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their
ambition and positivity, which
is
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are
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crucial to
huamn
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human
life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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