Some people believe these days teenagers are spending their leisure time at shopping centers instead of doing organized activities as sports or music . Do you think it has a negative or positive development?

Nowadays, when
social
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is developed, more and more
person
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people
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who
think
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they deserve to get more
benefit
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benefits
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like
spend
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freetime
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free time
to go
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going
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to shopping
centers
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centres
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. In
this
essay,
i
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I
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will
disscuss
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discuss
about pros and cons
for
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this
problem.
Firstly
, shopping
centers
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centres
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and
supermarket
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supermarkets
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are places
that
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where
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people can use their
money
to buy goods,
it
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which
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also
bring
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brings
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to
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apply
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them better
feeling
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feelings
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like
reduce
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reducing
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stress.
Moreover
, it is
method
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a method
the method
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that
help
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helps
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develop
economic
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the economic
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background
for
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of
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country
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the country
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. Teenagers will spend their
time
for
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apply
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shopping
instead
of doing organized activities like
sport
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sports
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or music, it just might they
dont
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do not
want to do them.
By
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the other hand, go to shopping can
be make
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be made
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hamful
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harmful
for teenagers when they have
not
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tonot
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earn
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earned
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money
,
that
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which
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mean
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means
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their
money
almost come from their parent.
This
is
negative
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a negative
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point because young person
can
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are
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not aware
that
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of
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difficult
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how difficult
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to earn
their
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apply
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money
have yet
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apply
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.
In addition
, if they
spent
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spend
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too much
of
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apply
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time
to go
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going
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to
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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, they will skip many works have to finish.
That is
a big problem. In conclusion, young people
spend
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spending
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their leisure
time
at shopping
centers
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centres
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have
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has
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both positive and negative. Positive things will be more when they know how to use
money
and manage
time
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