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Band 4.5

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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Nowadays the vast majority of imported consignments in every customs
are belonging
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 to
food
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, which is imported by different transportation to the countries. Based on statistical numbers it seems that
people
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 tend to use imported
food
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 rather than local. There could be several reasons for
people
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 to use imported
food
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instead
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 of local
food
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.
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 thing
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in every meal is the taste of it for
people
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. It is obvious,
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that
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different vegetables, fruit, and meat from different climates and areas do not have (have not) the same smells and tastes. It is evident that some
food
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 from another area will have
more
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higher
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 quality
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than
food
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which
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produced locally.
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the most motivation for
people
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 to buy imported
food
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 is the
price
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.
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 is
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 that the lower
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 of imported
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 is quite challenging for indigenous
farmers
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 and their products.
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, the quality and
price
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 of European wheat are much better than African. These two reasons are quite enough for consumers, to use imported
food
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.
Farmers
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 have different perspectives about imported
food
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. They strongly believe that
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 must be strong support from the government to produce
food
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 of
by
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appropriate quality at in competitive
price
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. Consumers and
farmers
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 all agree that it is essential to receive
subsidy
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to
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the
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both sides.
2Government
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2 government
 has a crucial role
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announce
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people
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 what is the
benefit
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benefits
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 of using local
food
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. As an illustration, it can talk about how many jobs are involved in the local manufactory. Local Radio and Television have
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an important role
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in announcing
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people
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 by creating some creative challenging competitive games about local
food
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 versus imported
food
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.
3In
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3 In
 a nutshell, it is essential to allocate some annual subsidies from the government to the
farmers
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 and consumers to produce and buy local foods.

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Clarify the reasons why people choose imported food and provide more comprehensive examples to support your arguments.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • novelty
  • diversity
  • perception
  • premium
  • globalization
  • cuisines
  • economic factors
  • subsidies
  • tariffs
  • competitive
  • farm-to-table
  • eco-conscious
  • consumption
  • sustainability
  • local economy
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