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Some people with a good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What are the problems caused by this?

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Globalization has deleted some borders, making it easier for
people
 who have enough courage to chase their dreams.
Moreover
, it is more likely to happen to
people
 who have excellent work experience and higher education than the rest,
for example
, minimum postgraduates. Developing
countries
 have the highest percentages of their citizen that moved abroad. The basic nature of humans, based on researchers, is they always want to get some more. Talking about the same
job
, the average wage in an economically developing country is categorized as far below average compared to more developed
countries
.
For example
, lawyers in third-world
countries
 have the same workload and working hours
as well as
 lawyers in first-world
countries
.
However
, the annual salary they get is pretty much different. Some
people
 see these as an issue and they really want higher pay .
Besides
 that,
people
 with marvellous knowledge have the kind of privilege to get the
job
 placement they desire. Nowadays, some companies offer "working from anywhere" but they are
also
 very selective in choosing their candidate because
this
 type of
job
 provides convenience. The company will pick the most outstanding candidate with a good education and extensive experience.
Therefore
, these
people
 get more chances to work from anywhere. You can actually have a
job
 in Canada
while
 you actually live in Scotland. In spite of the reasons above, these really create a long-term crisis, especially in developing
countries
. They are called "developing"
countries
 not without a single reason. They really need indigenous
people
, who are brilliant enough to bring the country out of the developing stage. But, sadly, the
countries
 have a lower chance of growing out of the market and they are stuck in the developing stage. All things considered, the disadvantages of
people
 moving abroad outweigh the advantages. Since it affects their mother country with bigger problems and long-term crises
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