Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country. Others think that they should live in a separate minority group with different lifestyle. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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believe

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that those who decide to relocate to another

country

should adjust the

rituals

of the new

regions

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whereas

others believe that they should stay

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own group and live in a different way.

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essay agrees that it is more beneficial for people who

accpet

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the new

rituals

. It must be recognized that

public

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should find a way to adjust to a bucolic's

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virtual

regulation.

This

is because you can learn

new

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language without

teacher

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or you can make friends, make your own network in the new region and the most important reason is that you will have more job

oppertunities

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opportunities

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, people who want to grow their

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will have

greater

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chance if they know all the

rituals

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country

. It is more easy to get jobs or

oppertunities

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opportunities

which can be successful.

Nevertheless

, others say that it is more comfortable to live in a small group. It is

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understand

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when people cannot follow the

rituals

which may not

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with

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their

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believes

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. The biggest reason is that they do not have to learn a new language, do not have to make friends. It is great for those who are

extrovert

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However

, at least they should still show their respect

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the differences.

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, a section of religious moved to

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country

which have rules contrary to their

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, the only they can do is

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their own group and adjust the rules but not follow

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. The writer believes that society must respect the

underlyding

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underlying

culture that existed for a long time when they

moeve

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move

moved

to another

country

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due to

the fact that you can experience new things which can help

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be successful and you can

also

get more benefit from the authority. Because of

this

public

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should be

accpect

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the new

rituals

so that they can develop and not be passive.

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, being

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accepting

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and

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new

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culture when you decide to

moved

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to another

country

necssary

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necessary

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also

been shown that you are a polite and flexible person.

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country. Others think that they should live in a separate minority group with different lifestyle. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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