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ome people with a good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What are the problems caused by this?

#ome #people #education #field #move #work
It is argued that citizens of many countries having excellent knowledge and experience prefer to
setlle
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settle
 in abroad. They choose
this
 for better
earning
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 and quality of life. There are
lot
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 of advantages and disadvantages which
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 will discuss in
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 paragraph. In my agreement person who has spent a lot of money on education and skill improvement
is deserved
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 to explore
foriegn
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foreign
 countries where anyone can improve his purchasing power. Every person wants to get his dreams fulfilled so in
try
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 to search
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 requirement one make a decision to move outside his country. On the other way, there are some disadvantages as well. One of the
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 is,
Sometime
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Sometimes
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 it is very difficult to adjust
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themselves
in
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to
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 their
enviornment
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environment
. People face
lot
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 of
struggle
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struggles
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 during their stay and end up with
frustraion
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frustration
frustrations
.
For
example
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 if anyone
move
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moves
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 from
thier
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their
 homeland he
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or find
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find
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finds
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living
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the living
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 situation tough. In conclusion, there are both pros and cons to
live
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living
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 and
work
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working
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 away from
parent
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the parent
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 country.
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