ome people with a good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What are the problems caused by this?

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It is argued that citizens of many countries having excellent knowledge and experience prefer to

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requirement one make a decision to move outside his country. On the other way, there are some disadvantages as well. One of the

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ome people with a good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What are the problems caused by this?

Fully explain your ideas

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?

some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views give your opinion.

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others, however, believe that schools in the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those times than they are now. What problems will this cause today and what can be done to solve these problems?