Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that developed
countries
should help developing
countries
by means other than
money
. I agree with
this
statement and will support my
arguements
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arguments
argument
with evidence. Rich and modern
nations
like England or Canada should not provide
money
to help
the
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poor
nations
like Niger or Sudan without supervision.
This
is because most of the governors of those
countries
will take the
money
for themselves, as they don't care about the development of their
countries
.
Moreover
, they can use the financial aid
in purchasing
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redundant materials that are not valid for the needed progress.
For instance
, they can buy weapons and tanks
eventhough
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even though
their
countries
are not
in
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war with others. Maybe it is an excuse in front of the world to justify taking the
money
for themselves. There are
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of other ways by which the rich
countries
could help the poor ones.
First,
they can send professionals like engineers
or
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doctors or financial experts to help the less fortunate
nations
. Those
professional
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will provide
advices
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that will develop the infrastructure of those
countries
.
In addition
, developed
countries
can send modern technology that can help
the
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others in many aspects of development like; education, agriculture and healthcare.
For example
, Turkey
has
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sent agricultural tractors and irrigation systems that helped Egypt
to
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farm their land and
produces
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food for their people.
Secondly
, modern
countries
can offer fully funded scholarships for
the
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students from
the
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poor
countries
, in
this
way education will be developed in the less
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nations
. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that indeed developing
countries
can have other methods to aid the poor
countries
rather than depending
sloley
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solely
on financial aid.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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