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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The chart illustrates the survey findings about
people
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's
coffee
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 and
tea
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 purchasing and habits of drinking in five different Australian cities in the
last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most popular habit of buying and drinking
coffee
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 and
tea
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 was going to a café in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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, and
Hobart
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 over a four-week time period.
Likewise
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, the least preferable way of purchasing and drinking was bringing fresh
coffee
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 to all cities.
However
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, in
Adelaide
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, the majority of citizens liked to buy instant
coffee
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.
To begin
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 with,going to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
last
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 four weeks in
Hobart
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 stood at nearly 63% which is almost the same as
Melbourne
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 (64%).
Similarly
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, more than 60% of
People
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 in
Sydney
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, prefer to go to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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while
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 it is just over 55% in
Brisbane
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. In
Adelaide
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, just below 50% of
people
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 wanted to go to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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.
Secondly
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, bringing instant
coffee
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 started at nearly 54% in
Hobart
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,
this
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 figure fell to just below 50% in
Adelaide
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. In the same way, citizens of
Brisbane
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 around 52% bring instant
coffee
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,
this
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 figure fell to roughly 48% and 45% in
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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 respectively.
Finally
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, bringing fresh
coffee
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 by
people
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 of
Hobart
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 stood at almost 38% in the
last
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 four weeks
whereas
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 in
Adelaide
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this
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 amount fell to just below 35% which is quite close to
Brisbane
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 (33%).
However
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,
this
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 proportion rose to around 42% in
Melbourne
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 and approximately 44% in
Sydney
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, tea, café, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, hobart, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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