The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
The graph illustrates the
usage
of global
water
in 3 different sectors ( agriculture, industrial and domestic) between 1900 to 2000,
while
the table
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reveals
information about
water
consumption in
Brazil
and
Congo
in 3 various types (
population
, irrigation and consumption per person) in 2000.
Overall
, the global
water
which was used by agriculture was more
that
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other
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the other
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two groups.
Additionally
, the
population
of
Brazil
was almost 30 times more than
Congo
and the average rate of
water
consumption was approximately 40 times more than
Congo
citizens. In 1990, almost 500km2 of
water
was used for agricultural parts,
while
this
number was less than 10km2 for both industrial and domestic parts. The
usage
of
water
for all 3 sectors significantly increased in the given period. In 2000, the
usage
of
agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector was 3000,
while
this
number was almost 1000 and 500 for industry and domestic
usage
,
repectively
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respectively
. The
population
of
Brazil
was 176 million,
while
the
population
of
Congo
was 5.2 million in 2000.
However
, the irrigation lands of
Brazil
was
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less
that
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than
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Congo
with 26500 km2 for
Brazil
and
100km2
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100 km2
for
Congo
. Brazilian people consumed 359m3
water
per person in comparison with
Congo
citizens, who consumed only 8m3
water
per person.
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